Trading Privacy for Status: A Short Poem About Modern Poverty

At the Break of Day

So that I would not feel poor, I 
bought a massive tv at the store—
removed a wall to get it in the house—
so that everyone who saw me in

my home would know—of 
poverty and rankings I have 
won—but of privacy, and space to 
dance and sing—I am undone.

I’m heading out in a few minutes to take my mom out for lunch so my commentary on this poem, at least for now, will be brief.

In that same spirit, I knew that I did not have much time this morning to write so I started out trying to write a shorter poem.

I have been analyzing my use of time lately and have found that I am not staying committed to the things that I find myself wishing I’d accomplished at the end of the day: writing, exercising, reading, and writing music.

Because I am essentially retired (at least from teaching) my days are fairly wide open. Because of this, I am not as careful about how I spend my time early in the day, especially when I first wake up.

My habit is to do a sudoku puzzle, drink coffee, take the dogs out, and then see if I have time for anything else before I get to work on the rest of the day.

The morning, though, is my most productive time. I am full of greater energy than I will have the rest of the day. My mind is more focused. I am not interrupted.

So how does this speak to the genesis of this poem?

Really it’s about those last lines–having time to dance and sing. That is the richness I want in my life. That is the treasure I will look back and wonder why I didn’t spend more time being creative and taking creative risks.

Here’s the conversation that I had with my poetry mentor. You can see the poem came a long way.

I also asked my mentor to create an SEO aware title for this post. We will see how it goes!

One response to “Trading Privacy for Status: A Short Poem About Modern Poverty”

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    Anonymous

    While I like nearly all your poems (usually without explanation, but more so with them), this one spoke to me immediately. It prompted me to read the dialogue with your “poetry mentor”. So interesting.

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